Story Coaching &

Dev Editing Service Details

Momentum Story Coaching

Story coaching is a collaborative, hands-on partnership designed to help you make steady, confident progress from idea to finished draft. Whether you’re just beginning or are revising an existing manuscript, I work with you in focused, one-hour sessions to move your story forward with clarity, accountability, and craft-grounded guidance.


Each coaching session includes my pre-meeting review of up to 2,500 words from your scenes, chapters, plot outline, or notes. During our Zoom call, we discuss your pages, troubleshoot craft issues, answer questions, and set concrete next steps so you always leave knowing what to do next.

What we work on together

Scene & Story Structure — order, escalation, causality, and how each scene earns its place

Plot planning — identifying missing beats and removing what doesn’t serve the story

Character & Motivation — clarifying internal/external goals to drive momentum

Genre foundations — shaping the work to meet reader and market expectations

Revision strategy — how to rewrite for tension, clarity, and emotional payoff

Accountability & Support — staying on schedule with encouragement and deadlines

You’ll get:

  • Pre-session review of new scenes, chapters, or outlines (up to 2,500 words)
  • In-document comments and live coaching on your draft-in-progress
  • One-on-one, 1-hour Zoom meeting per coaching session
  • Revision plan assignments between meetings
  • A clear, personalized action plan after every session
  • Encouragement, craft advice, and a thinking partner through the process

Story coaching covers the drafting and revising stages. When you complete a full draft and are ready for a holistic review, we can transition into a separate Developmental Edit contract to evaluate the full manuscript.


Session Packages

  • One-time Story Jumpstart — $250
  • 2-Session Package (meet every other week) — $400
  • 4-Session Package (meet once a week) — $800

Sessions must be used within two months of purchase.


Together, we’ll keep you moving and get you to “The End” with a story that works.

Hook Your Reader in Five Pages 

Your story’s first five pages are your chance to grab reader attention, build curiosity, and keep them turning pages. Whether you’re writing a short story, novel, or memoir, those opening lines set expectations and invite readers into the world of your story.

A first five-page story coaching session will

tell you if your story’s beginning hooks readers or risks losing them. You will receive professional insight—and the encouragement needed to take your story further.

You’ll get:

  • A professional reading of your first five pages
  • Feedback notes + a one-page assessment
  • A 15-minute Zoom session to talk next steps
Ready to see if your story will hook readers?

Fifty First Pages Story Review

A story’s first chapters have the job of compelling readers to keep reading. These first pages need to grab attention, build curiosity, and make readers want to know what happens next. The story's beginning has many simultaneous functions, like introducing primary characters, sources of conflict, and the protagonist’s motivating goal and emotional need.

A Fifty First Pages Story Review (first 12,500 words) includes:

  • Comprehensive Story Analysis
  • Detailed Editorial Letter
  • Scene-Level Insights
  • Next Steps for Revision
  • Follow-Up Coaching Call (30 minutes)

Fifty First Pages Story Review is for Authors

  • Polishing opening chapters before querying or publishing
  • Seeking professional feedback before investing in a full developmental edit
  • Confirming their story begins with purpose, clarity, and power
Assessments typically take 2 to 4 weeks to complete.
I will confirm the turnaround time when you place your order.

Manuscript Evaluation

A manuscript evaluation is a cost-effective way to have your novel reviewed by a professional editor. I will read your full manuscript and deliver in-document comments and a written editorial letter that provide a high-level review of what’s working, what isn’t, and clear next-step recommendations.

I call out strengths and weaknesses in core story areas such as characterization, conflict and tension, plot, pacing, point of view, scene development, description, and showing vs. telling. I also note patterns in grammar and style as a courtesy, but I do not line-edit or correct every instance.

You’ll come away with:

  • A complete read-through from an experienced developmental editor
  • Targeted margin comments showing exactly where scenes or pages need rethinking
  • A high-level editorial letter outlining what works, what needs strengthening, and how to approach revisions
  • Concrete next-steps and revision guidance so you know what to do with the feedback
  • Curated outside resources to help you dive deeper into any recurring problem areas



This service is ideal when the overall story is already in place, but sections need restructuring, deepening, or clarification before moving on to more intensive editing or author revision.

Developmental Edit

A developmental edit delivers deep, story-level guidance to help you rewrite with clarity and confidence. This service identifies problem areas and shows you how to fix them with marked-up pages, structural recommendations, and a step-by-step plan for revision.


I read the full manuscript and assess genre expectations, story structure, character arcs, pacing, theme, point of view, tension, and overall reader experience. I identify where scenes can be rearranged, expanded, condensed, or cut, and note inconsistencies, missing information, slow pacing, passive language, and unclear motivations. 

You’ll come away with:

  • In-document comments and sample revisions showing precisely where and why change is needed
  • A comprehensive editorial letter detailing what is working, what needs development, and specific revision strategies
  • A story-tracking spreadsheet analyzing scenes, chapters, and character arcs to pinpoint structural weaknesses and fixes
  • A full revision roadmap with concrete instructions walking you through the next draft
  • Curated outside resources to help you tackle recurring craft issues
  • A 1:1 discussion call (phone/Zoom/in-person) to review findings and ensure you understand your next steps


A developmental edit is ideal when the story exists in full draft form, but the plot, character journey, and chapter structure still require shaping to deliver a clear, compelling, publish-ready reading experience.